His sentence: If I'd run away, the misery could have lasted forever: they might have lived the rest of their lives hoping I'd come back, searching, believeing I would one day return.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The use of a colon connects two independent clauses. In the second clause, parallel structure is used, "hoping...searching...believing." This creates some stability in the sentence and also proves the relevance of the first clause.
My sentence: If he hadn't left, they could have been happy together: they might have continued on like normal, talking, laughing, and loving together.
Monday, October 12, 2009
Sentence 5
His sentence: But ordinary humans...I could rip them apart in a second.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The series of periods is used to show the writer's pause in thought in order to put emphasis on the following clause.
My sentence: But my brother...I wanted to rip his head off.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The series of periods is used to show the writer's pause in thought in order to put emphasis on the following clause.
My sentence: But my brother...I wanted to rip his head off.
Sentence 4
His sentence: The goat would die in the end, if we left it-there was no cure for Madam Octa's bite-but we shall finish it quickly.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The set of dashes interrupts the thought to explain what is going on; why the goat would die.
My sentence: We thought we would never get out-the haunted house was a maze-but we finally found our way to the much-anticipated end.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The set of dashes interrupts the thought to explain what is going on; why the goat would die.
My sentence: We thought we would never get out-the haunted house was a maze-but we finally found our way to the much-anticipated end.
Sentence 3
His sentence: Mr. Crepsley produced a shiny tin whistle-he called it a flute-from his pants a blew a few short notes.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The use of dashes interrupts the writer's initial thought, further describing the "shiny tin whistle" to make it easier for the reader to understand the instrument.
My sentence: Taylor got out an elaborate necklace-it was made of diamonds and white gold-from her purse and fastened it around her neck.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The use of dashes interrupts the writer's initial thought, further describing the "shiny tin whistle" to make it easier for the reader to understand the instrument.
My sentence: Taylor got out an elaborate necklace-it was made of diamonds and white gold-from her purse and fastened it around her neck.
Sentence 2
His Sentence: The ladies who had hypnotized the wolf-man came out with two carts full of food: cakes chips, hamburgers, packages of candy and heads of cabbage.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan.
The colon is used set off a list describing a noun from the independent clause before it.
My Sentence: The girls who had skipped school to shop finally left the mall carrying shopping bags full of new things: shirts, pants, skirts, shoes, and accessories.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan.
The colon is used set off a list describing a noun from the independent clause before it.
My Sentence: The girls who had skipped school to shop finally left the mall carrying shopping bags full of new things: shirts, pants, skirts, shoes, and accessories.
Friday, September 25, 2009
Sentence 1
His Sentence: I don't blame them: he would have sqaushed them flat as a pancake if he fell.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan.
The use of a colon in the sentence connects two independent clauses in which the second clause intensifies the first.
My Sentence: I didn't undersand: she always had the solution for everything.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan.
The use of a colon in the sentence connects two independent clauses in which the second clause intensifies the first.
My Sentence: I didn't undersand: she always had the solution for everything.
Thursday, June 18, 2009
DESiGN...
What exactly is design?
Design is something that everyone does every day. We may not always realize it, but design has become a huge part of business. As Daniel Pink says in A Whole New Mind, "decent quality and reasonable price have become merely table stakes in the business game."
While design might be a good thing, it can also be negative. We, as people, often care more about the way things look than what we are actually getting out of a product. In our society, we only pay attention to the outside, and simply ignore the rest.
After reading the chapter on design, I pay more attention to what a product is going to do for me than what the product looks like. Just because something appeals to the eye doesn't mean that it is more useful than another product that is less appealing.
Design is something that everyone does every day. We may not always realize it, but design has become a huge part of business. As Daniel Pink says in A Whole New Mind, "decent quality and reasonable price have become merely table stakes in the business game."
While design might be a good thing, it can also be negative. We, as people, often care more about the way things look than what we are actually getting out of a product. In our society, we only pay attention to the outside, and simply ignore the rest.
After reading the chapter on design, I pay more attention to what a product is going to do for me than what the product looks like. Just because something appeals to the eye doesn't mean that it is more useful than another product that is less appealing.
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