Monday, November 23, 2009
Monday, October 12, 2009
Sentence 12
His sentence: I cleaned up their tent and rolled up their hammocks-they all slept in hammocks.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The hyphen connects two independent clauses in which the second clause clarifies the first one.
My sentence: She quietly slid out her window and took off running, not stopping until she reached the hill-the friends always met at the top of the hill.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The hyphen connects two independent clauses in which the second clause clarifies the first one.
My sentence: She quietly slid out her window and took off running, not stopping until she reached the hill-the friends always met at the top of the hill.
Sentence 11
His sentence: They were funny-looking people: long hair, strange clothes, weighed down with fancy earrings and bracelets.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
In this sentence, a colon is used to start a list of adjectives that described the subject of the first clause.
My sentence: They were incredibly creepy: dark blue cloaks, hidden faces, never talked.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
In this sentence, a colon is used to start a list of adjectives that described the subject of the first clause.
My sentence: They were incredibly creepy: dark blue cloaks, hidden faces, never talked.
Sentence 10
His sentence: When we die, if we have lived good lives, our spirits float free of the earth, cross the stars and galaxies, and come at last to a world at the other side of the universe-Paradise.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
This is a cumulative sentence, because it uses many parallel phrases, to build up to the ultimate end, Paradise. The dash before the word "Paradise" is used to make the word stand out.
My sentence: We got up early that morning, drove out of the town, continued for hours, and finally reached our beautiful destination-Florida.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
This is a cumulative sentence, because it uses many parallel phrases, to build up to the ultimate end, Paradise. The dash before the word "Paradise" is used to make the word stand out.
My sentence: We got up early that morning, drove out of the town, continued for hours, and finally reached our beautiful destination-Florida.
Sentence 9
His sentence: They were terrified of me...Darren Shan...a monster.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The series of periods quickly and vividly describe the character. In this case, a monster.
My sentence: They envied him...John Tucker...the womanizer.
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The series of periods quickly and vividly describe the character. In this case, a monster.
My sentence: They envied him...John Tucker...the womanizer.
Sentence 8
His sentence: And before it snapped-had there been the slightest rustling sound, like something moving?
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The sentence begins with a conjunction and a dash to add to the fearful and confused thoughts of the character. The character is questioning what he thinks he has heard.
My sentence: But right before the phone rang-had there been a "thump" sound outside, like someone had stumbled by the living room window?
From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan
The sentence begins with a conjunction and a dash to add to the fearful and confused thoughts of the character. The character is questioning what he thinks he has heard.
My sentence: But right before the phone rang-had there been a "thump" sound outside, like someone had stumbled by the living room window?
Sentence 7
His sentence: I'd always rather the truth-however unpleasant it might be-than a lie.
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
From Cirque Du Freak by Darren Shan
The thought within the set of dashes is used to emphasize the importance of the truth; rather than being told a lie just to avoid unpleasant feelings.
My sentence: Eric would never tell his friends-no matter the circumstances-what he had done.
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