Sentence 8

His sentence: And before it snapped-had there been the slightest rustling sound, like something moving?

From The Vampire's Assistant by Darren Shan

The sentence begins with a conjunction and a dash to add to the fearful and confused thoughts of the character. The character is questioning what he thinks he has heard.

My sentence: But right before the phone rang-had there been a "thump" sound outside, like someone had stumbled by the living room window?